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In the present age,private cars have been prevalent in our modern lives.Among transportations,private cars exert profound impact our society.In the meanwhile,whether the private car is a blessing or a curse has sparked spirited debate.Some individuals argue that private cars have only beneficial influence while many others contend that it has detrimental effects as well.Personally,I agree with the latter view.
A convincing argument can be made that,private cars carry considerable drawbacks.To begin with,pollution created by private cars has detrimental effects on human health.To illustrate,people living in large cities suffer from polluted air,which has rendered damages on breathing organs,especially for adolescents.Moreover,the traffic system in many large cities is on the edge of meltdown and the increase of private cars aggregates traffic stress.For example,a host of Beijing citizens complain that the traffic congestion has doubled the time they spend in traffic since

提问时间：2021-04-01

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论点非常好,语法点好,单词好,非常好.你想那几分啊?
我想要纠正的唯一一点就是 好处里头的 第一个论点写的有点多余,我觉得直接写它对经济的贡献 就可以了,不用写家庭方面的论点.