题目

本人10.23 号考雅思,目标是6,希望各位高人批改一下我的大作文,最好能给以个具体分数.
这个是问题：In modern society,fashion has been becoming more popular in people’s daily lives.What are the causes of this phenomenon?Do you think it is a positive development or negative development?
正文：
In the present age,with the rapid development of free trade market and media,fashion has been played a pivotal role in people’s life.They follow the fashion trend ever year,even every month.About this phenomenon,two main arguments often heard.One is that is a positive development,while another view that is a negative development.Personally,I am in favor of the later.
There are reasons for some people to believe that is a negative development.In the first place,many young students spend too much money which from their parents on running after the latest fashion clothes,phones,computers and so on.Specifically,this promotes the compare psychology in peers,which has the bad impact on their study work and the relationship between other

提问时间：2021-03-31

答案

这个作文应该有6.
建议就是不要套模板.会更高~~