题目

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一,A special Children's Day
Afrer the wenchuan earthquake, many children were hurt,some are in hospital,and some are out of hospital.Many volunteers want to make children that hurt in earthquake happy on June,1.
On that day,the policeman and children hand in hand,and they went shopping.And university students played with childre that out of hospitaland went to school,they smiled a lot.Doctor gave a toy doll to a little girl who hurt and lay on the bed,the little girl felt very happy. There also sport stars chat with some children who hurt badly,encouraged them to be brave and hoped them go out of the hospital early.The litte patients felt warm and bright.
All the volunteers tried their best to make them happy,and gave them a special Children's Day,a Children's Day that they can't forget forever!

提问时间：2021-03-29

答案

1)用过去时就全部用过去时.所以第一行：are都该改were.第二行want改成wanted.2)孩子们被伤害用被动.第二行children that hurt改children that were hurt3)earthquake特指此次地震,要加定冠词the4)第二段了.policeman...