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The line chart demonstrates data about travel to and from Britain while the bar chart indicates information about the most famous states for Britain inhabitents to visit
As can be seen from the line chart ,the number of the UK visitors and the figure for the foreign visitors who visited to the UK both arrived at around 10 millions respectively in 1979. However,there was a sharp grow in the number of UK visitors while the number of foreign visitors rose gradully from 1985 to 1999.The number of uk visitors arrived at almost 53 millions and the figure for the foreign stood at around 28 millions.
According to the bar chart, it can be clearly seen the most UK visitors visited Spain and France in 1999.To be more exact, UK visitors visited 5 most popular states were made up of Turkey(around 2.5 millions),Greece(around 3 millions),USA (around 4 millions)and the france(around 11.5 millions)
In general, the number of the U

提问时间：2021-01-30

答案

你这篇应该是6分.开头第一段,不要特地把line chart,bar chart写出来.显得有点啰嗦,而且我们主要看你是否能把图表信息描述清楚,至于是啥图,并不关心.第二句话,很有问题.我想这应该用the most popular travel destinat...