题目

英语作文,帮我看看有没有语法错误和用词不当的,以及怎样修改,非常非常感谢,一鞠躬：）
As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above,the Internet is a spider web of thousands of networks,linking schools,universities,businesses,government agencies,libraries and millions of individuals.It is conceivable that the Internet plays an important role in our life for the time being.
The implied meaning which is conveyed in the drawing can be briefly stated in the following two aspects.To begin with,the Internet has a great influence on our lives.With the rapid spread of the Internet since the early 90’s,the communication between us becomes more and more frequent.No matter where they live,it is always very easy to express feeling to them if you would like.Hence,it is apparent that we are closely connected with each other thanks to the Internet.What’s more,there is no denying the fact that the meeting between friends are fewer and fewer.Something must be done in a face-to-face situation.For instance,we need to watch over the sickbeds of our nearest relatives to help them overcome the disease.
Accordingly,the internet is only a tool to facilitate some kinds of communication,and human relationship is much more than that,we must learn to balance the fictitious and real life.Only in this way can we enjoy a manifold and harmonious human relationship.

提问时间：2021-01-10

答案

1.As is vividly demonstrated in the picture above.As 后加It
2.businesses 是不可数名词
3.millions of individuals 没见过这种表达,用 people 保险一点
4.Internet has a great influence on our lives.influence 是可数名词,前面是很多的意思,故加s
5.Internet since the early 90’s,改成英文格式是90's,还有一处也是
6.the communication between us becomes more and more frequent.No matter where they live,it is always very easy to express feeling to them if you would like·· between 改 among,前面是 us 后面宾格又成了 them,feeling 是可数名词
7.the meeting between friends are fewer and fewer meeting 很容易理解为会议 meet 有集会的意思,between 改 among,前者一般是表两者之间
8.we must learn to balance the fictitious and real life 后半句改下 balance the life between the fictious and the real one.