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Q：many people believe that the main aim for university education is to help graduates to find better jobs, while some people believe that university education has wider benefits for individuals and society . Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In recent years, going to universities to get better education has become a very popular choice among students. However, when it comes to talk about the main aim for university education, opinions are various. While many people are behind this stance that the university education can help graduates to find better jobs, the rest of people hold the view that university education has wider benefits for individuals and society. But I found it hard for me to agree both of them fully. As far as I am concerned, these two ideas are reconcilable.
First of all, the main job of university it to cultivate talents who can make great contribution to the society. After studying very hard for 12 years, high school grad

提问时间：2020-12-06

答案

when it comes to 改成 in terms of 结构的,who lack 我知道你的意思,但do not have 就行了,lack 很少用在人上.总体上语法中规中矩,可以到6分吧,再高就看运气了.不过你的观点好像有点一边倒了,这个除非是大牛可以这...