题目

急 请高手帮我看看这一小段英语(intrduce)有没有语法错误 并帮我改正
This is Flora,she is from China,she has been living in Canada for nine month.But her parents living in China.She has one older sister and one younger brother.She is not married.She lives in Vancouver with her friend.She is studying English in VCC,at night.She also work full time as a packer at a TNT supermarket,life is really busy,but she enjoy reading,listening to music and hanging out with friends in her free time.

提问时间：2021-05-06

答案

写的时候再认真一点就好了,都是些小毛病.
明显的错误就不说了.
But her parents living in China.living不对,最起码改成live
older sister,用elder sister比较好
She is not married,写She is single,简练
She also work full time,改成works
in her free time 改成during her free time
注意,句号使用的不太规范.
but和and不要用在句子开头,很不规范,会给人一种没有学过写作的乡下人的感觉