题目

这段话有语法错误吗.
Our mobile phones are suitable for people of all ages and jobs,in other words,all the people can find their own favourite mobile phones.The trend for COCO company is growing.We predict our consumers will reach one hundred thousand by 2019.Our main competitors are Nokia,Samsung,LG and their products have a long history are already accepted by the general public.Our mobile phones have a lot of advantages,for example the sound is louder,the accuracy is higher,the font is bigger.We believe that our mobile phones will certainly became number one.

提问时间：2021-03-29

答案

1/ 第一句话,比较Chinese style English.英文最好直接简明表达,不是越长越好.
适合任何阶层和年龄的人士,be suitable for all kinds of people.
in other words,至第二行句号前,可以删除.意思累赘.
2/ 你们的公司正在不断发展,grow 可以说花草,种植,grow up 说人成长.
公司发展用develop比较适合.
3/ predict 是预言,预测未来.比较中国式口吻.trust or believe is more suitable.
4/ Line 4.and 后面此并列句子在无从句的状态下,无介词,同时使用了两个动词,不合语法规律.their products have a long history are already.动词have,N are不合语法.
and之前是line 3和line4连接两个句子,再用and 去连接are already 显得非常累赘.
their products have a long history which already be well recognized by global.
整段,是一个销售手机的公司的简介.类似销售手机业务员的推销