题目

自己写的2010北京高考英语作文 看看有语法错误没*^__^*
First ,I got some information on the Internet .So we knew what the weather would be like and we decided when to go .In addition ,I booked two train tickets and a hotel room .
About some hours latter ,I went to the store which sells train tickets and got my grandparents` tickets .After I went back home ,I helped my grandparents to prepare their clothes ,also ,i bought them a map of Beidaihe .At last ,I drove my grandparents to the train station .After seeing them seated on the train ,I said "Bye bye "to them ,and I didn't leave the station until the train started moving .

提问时间：2021-03-23

答案

First ,I got some information on the Internet. 应该是got some information from the internet 或 searched some information on the internet 注意介词的搭配
So we knew what the weather would be like and we decided when to go .这不是一个完整的句子,如果要用So的话前面应该有句子阐释原因,所以建议你把前两个句子连成一个完整的句子,比如：First ,we got some information from the Internet , so we knew what the weather would be like and decided when to go. 统一一下主语,并且在后面不需要赘述一遍we了 直接用并列格式更好一些.
In addition ,I booked two train tickets and a hotel room .
in addition用在这里感觉怪怪的.但语法上应该问题不大.
About some hours latter ,I went to the store which sells train tickets and got my grandparents` tickets. 这句话给我理解上造成了一点混淆,不是之前已经说过了book tickets为什么现在又要got tickets?如果只是取票的话还是picked up tickets好一些.
After I went back home ,I helped my grandparents to prepare their clothes ,also ,i bought them a map of Beidaihe . 首先help ... prepare 不需要加to 其次这个句子应该被拆分为两句：After I went back home ,I helped my grandparents to prepare their clothes. Also ,I bought them a map of Beidaihe. 在同一个句子里赘述两个不不相***事情是很奇怪的.另外还有就是句子的顺序需要调整一下,既然都已经went back home了还怎么bought maps.
At last ,I drove my grandparents to the train station. 这句还好
After seeing them seated on the train ,I said "Bye bye "to them ,and I didn't leave the station until the train started moving . 首先seated不是动词而是形容词 不可以这样用 其次前面这个after非常怪.因为这些动作是连续发生的,所以个人认为更好的表达是：
I saw them get seated on the train, said "Bye bye" to them and stayed in the station until the train started to move.
个人改东西比较picky一点.但因为也不是native speaker所以也可能出错.
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