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I had received the CET-4 certificate and learned office software,Photoshop,Illustrator and so on in college.And I had learned Korean for two years with advantage of studying in Yanbian University.I can read and write basically in Korean by now.
I'd like to accept new knowledge and create.I am good at reviewing useful experience and learning lessons from mistakes.I still lacked in experience,but I trust fervor is more important than experience.I believe I can work hard with the faith of never give up.I'll keep on studying hard and suit the new condition as soon as possible.
I sincerely desire to have the pleasure of serving your company.I hope you can give me one chance,and I appreciate your consideration.
Wish prosperity your company!
Sincerely yours,
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提问时间：2021-02-10

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大哥,你这是在写简历不是写信?建议如下,只是大概框架,可以增加内容：
Although I have little experiences,I am goog at learning and willing to accept new things.I won't afraid of any difficulty,and can work and grow under great pressure.
I passed CET4 and goot at operating MS office software,Photoshop,Illustrator,etc.Having studied Korean in Yanbian university for twoo years,I can read and write fluentely in Korean.
I'll be grateful if you could give me a chance for an interview.Thanks for your attention.
Sincerely yours,