题目

有没有雅思强人可以对我写得这篇给点意见打打分吗.我写作一直不太好,也没什么提高.
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays,population of male and female is going to have a big gap.It was predicted that population of male would be great larger than that of female in the future.This kind of unbalance could trigger one issue:in college,the number of male and female students in each subject could be quiet different.Therefore,this essay is written to represent my own opinion about whether universities should accept the equal numbers of male and female students.
A great amount of people disagree with the statement that college should accept equal numbers of boys and girls in every subject.The reason for this could be two.Firstly,it is difficult to carry on.To be more specific,students go to college is depending on the score.If their scores are quiet high,university has no reason to reject their application about the subject th

提问时间：2021-01-04

答案

太长没看完 就看了两段 个人觉得重复词太多 雅思写作也是展现词汇量的地方 多点替代词看着不会太无聊 btw 结构真的好雅思写作啊 哈哈 good luck