题目

求一编大英作文“Tradition Respect for Old Age China”
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提问时间：2020-12-14

答案

There is a fine(old比较好,没有fine tradition一说) tradition that the young should respect（pay respect to比单一的respect要好） the elder（the elderly） in China（in China最好掉到old tradition后,这样比较顺）.The tradition continues until now（这一整句改成This moral has been preserved until now更好）.But with the fast（rapid） development of the society,some young people have no time to show their respect to（show respct for或者pay respect to） their parents.Young people have their own social circles,and there are different ways of life from their parents.（这一句改为：As the young have their own social circles,their life can be very different from their parents'） They prefer going out for（改为on）a holiday to living together with their parents（整句改为They preferto going out on holidays than staying together with their family.prefer doing to doing sth是对的但不常用）.I think young people need their own life and（改为but） they shouldn’t ignore their parents’ life the same（the same改为as well,整句话是个人观点,宜放在最前面或者最后总结,不应在此插入）.Nowadays young people need to（need to 改为are forced to,不是他们自己愿意face的） face（the） intense（intensive,不是intense） competition,（And,此处少连词）they need to（have to,理由同上） make more money to support their family.As a result,they have to make a difficult choice between playing out of doors and caring for their parents on holidays（这句话是典型的Chinguish,改为：As a result,they have to get trapped in a dilemna between their social life and family relations）.Caring for parents is obligatory,but I think young people should help their parents to look for their own life(这句整句话是什么意思?我没看懂).There is a eneration（这个不算generation gap吧?直接改为There lies a huge gap between...） gap between young people and their parents—different tastes,(distinctive) hobbies,(insimilar)ideas and so on.Young people don’t want to change their life-style(中间没有连字符) and s