题目

帮忙批改雅思小作文并评分!是个流程图
剑6 Text 3 流程图小作文：
The process diagram illustrates in four stages about the life cycle of the silkworm and five states about how silk clothes are produced.
According to the first diagram,eggs became to silkworm larva need 10 days.At this stage,larva are fed with mulberry leaf than spend 4-6weeks to transform to silk thread.At the third stage,larva need 3-8 days to become to a cocoon which can be produced into silk cloth while after 16 days new moth born which can lay eggs again.
The cocoons are selected to the next stage to boil in water.Every thread may have 300-900m long.At next stage,threads are twisted and then dyed.Next,the last diagram is called weave Cocoon at last be made into silk cloth.
Thus,four process diagram clearly shows the silkworm’s life cycle and five process diagram shows how silk cloth finally be made.

提问时间：2020-12-02

答案

因为我没有雅思6的原因 只能看语法那些了 哈哈首段我觉得没什么问题!但是第二段的时态有问题 那些过程不是过去的 是事实对吧 所以应该是一般现在时啊 还有我觉得那个diagram 用的时候有点表述不清啊 你第一段不是说...