题目

英语翻译
My name is ***,I am 15 years old,born in Hangzhou .I am open-minded ,quick in thought and very fond of history.In my spare time,I have broad interests like many other youngers.I like reading books,especially those about *******.I Am pleased to be able to join you.Today,we can gather here is a fate.I like art so that is the reason why I come here to compete for this position.generally speaking ,i am a hard working student especially do the thing i am interested in.i will try my best to finish it no matter how difficult it is.I think I'm a good team player and I'm a person of great honesty to others.Also I am able to work under certain pressure.That’s all.Thank you for giving me the chance.
I always believe that one will easily lag behind unless he keeps on learning,So,I think in the days ahead we can become friends,And the friendship of all dormitory is also very important
ok,i know my english is not good enough ,i will continue studying.
that is all,thank you for your attention
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提问时间：2020-11-02

答案

1、不能直接用born in Hangzhou.应为I was born in Hangzhou.过去式.
2、youngers最好改成teenagers
3、I Am pleased to be able to join you.中把be able to 划去吧,有点累赘.
4、Today,we can gather here is a fate.语法错误.至少应该在we前加that.但建议说成I feel lucky that we can get together today.
fate 用作命运更多些.
5、I like art so that is the reason why I come here to compete for this position.这句话语义重复了,而且作为演讲不要用太长的句子,更不要太文绉绉.或者分成两个句子不用so .
建议说成I like art so much that I came(应该过去式,或用成 am standing ) here to compete for the position.或者用I like art very much.And that's the reason why I came ...
6、especially do the thing 将do改成doing
7、 And the friendship of all dormitory is also very important.不晓得你为何用dormitory,如果你指室友间的友谊,用roommates,dormitory指寝室.
8、ok,i know my english is not good enough ,i will continue studying.语言上,将continue改成keep on更地道些.个人认为,不用谦虚,这是许多初学者（甚至已经很有水平的人）爱说的话.但这只是中国文化中经常提倡的,实际上在英国文化中有些多余（个人理解）.建议把演讲稿练熟了,自信些就行了.
祝成功.