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Q:Traffic and housing problems in major cities would be solved by moving big companies,factories and their employees to the countryside.Do you agree or disagree?
In modern society,with the development of economy in majoy cities.More and more companies and factories invest in these developed cities.They set up their business by compete landscapes in cities and establish buildings or factories in order to creat profit.However,large amounts of buildings and employees lead numbers of people in cities increase.They could be raise the problems of traffic and housing.I am in favor of the point that moving big companies,factories and their employees to countryside.
As we all know,when there was no big companies and factories,city must be peace and people could not upset by traffic.Now,with the increased amounts of unlocaled employees in those companies,everytime go for work in morning and go home in the evening there must have traffic problems.Moreover,companies and

提问时间：2020-10-30

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你这个文章介于3.4-4.5,在不破坏你原意的前提下,帮你简单改了下,有不少低级语法错误,用词错误,整个文章形有了,但具体的细节还需要很大的加强才行,句子多备些地道的模板,不要自己编,用词要准确,不是很懂的词不要乱用,...