题目

帮我看看这篇英语作文写的有什么问题
One day,Li Hua in the gate way to mouth to pick up a classroom building size is 40 * 60 cm yellow suitcase,
Lost and Found
One day,li hua found the suitcase is yellow.It size is 40 * 60 cm.There are a jacket,three textbooks,and which an English book is; there are 100yuan in an English book.And there is a radio,and a pencil box in it.Suitcase is on the way to the teaching building at the school gate picked up.
Address:High school class one,Grade six.Li Hua
Tel:[phone] please make reservations in advance
不好意思，前面第一段，汗一个，有一句话多余。

提问时间：2020-10-08

答案

很多错误啊
THERE BE句型有就近原则不知道吗?
应该是There is a jacket.
而且后面直接说就可以,为什么要加定语从句啊
最好把所有的东西一句话说完
再介绍细节,要不很乱,而且多次重复
最后一句话很别扭
改为：Li Hua picked up that suitcase at the school gate,on the way to the teaching building
要是有必要的话可以HI我,我全天在线
可以重写
纯正美语,希望加分,也希望有帮到你,我急用分,