题目

把我改作文：Great changes in my hometown
个位英语高手给个分数,然后把我改一下,本人高三（不好意思水平很烂,在冲刺阶段,英语更加要充实）
Great changes in my hometown
I remember when I was a child ,my hometown was only a small city, And the fields were not far from my home. So if you want ti have a good breath, you could walk to that fields for having a good breath.
Now, about 15 years ago, my hometown has great changes. For example:every fields were changed into the big buildings ,and there are more and more cars across on the street here and there. But if you want to relax and have a good breath,you’d better to find the fields from the city edge..
I’m pleased to have this developed hometown, but I’ll never forget the home which was clean and beaut before then.
一定要先给个分数,我估一下我月考的分数!谢谢!
总分就是15分!

提问时间：2020-08-01

答案

你的作文3处较严重语法错误,字写错了2个,标点大小写错误4处,内容有待充实.第一项最多8分,第二项最多12-3-6x0.5=6,这样14分左右.（声明：我没干过老师,看下面的标准来评的,仅供参考)高考作文评分标准：＝＝＝＝＝＝＝...